like a psychotic rainbow (raindroproses) wrote,
like a psychotic rainbow
raindroproses

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Out-of-characterness... it burns...

*whimper* I'm sorry. I am so, so sorry for enabling this person to inflict this on the world:


"I am so sorry for any lies I had to tell you. I have loved you from the first moment I laid eyes on you. I fought it for so long. The mission was heaven and hell. I wanted you and didn't think I had a chance, and then with the amnesia all my dreams came true."

"Really, AJ? You’re telling me the truth?" she exclaimed, the tears now falling down her cheeks.

"Yes. I love you with all my heart." He smiled, wiping away her tears. Still on one knee in front of her, he pulled her rings from his pocket, and held them out to her on his open palm. "These past weeks, having you and Angela with me, have made me so very happy. Please say you'll give me a chance to prove I love you."

"I think I've known it all along, my love. I was just so afraid to look into your eyes and see I was wrong. To see regret," cried Sarah.

"Sarah, my love, look deep into my eyes and tell me what you see. Tell me what my heart has held in secret these past eight years. Tell me what I can no longer deny--what I wish to tell the world. Look into my eyes and see the love that burns there for you."

Gazing into his warm chocolate brown eyes, Sarah could see the love there. How could she have missed it all these years? So much love filled his eyes that she could almost feel the touch of it on her body. So warm and tender, and yet with a promise of overwhelming rapture. "Oh, AJ, you truly do love me as much as I love you. Can you forgive me for being such a fool, sweetheart? Can you take Angela and I back home where we belong?"

"There's nothing to forgive, my beautiful princess. Will you take your mother’s ring back, my love?" he requested, placing it gently on her finger after she nodded. "This wedding band and engagement ring I chose for you the moment I saw it. It has so much beauty and fire, just like you, my Sarah. Will you wear it for me again, and be my wife in all ways?"

"Yes, my handsome husband, but I insist upon a real wedding. One I will always remember. I want to walk down the aisle to stand beside you and say our vows. A day I will remember when I'm old and gray."


*grinds teeth* AJ and Mac are NOT romance novel characters, goddamn it! How in the hell do you manage to write nearly 300 pages of this tripe?! I love you, sweetie, but you really, really need to work on your characterization.
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